News Writing
Invitational A Meet ∘ 2005
On Monday night, the school board will meet to vote if Jim Stack [Junior] should be able to grow his hair out 10 inches, which is against school policy, for Locks of Love.
Stack asked Tonya King [Principal] if he could have an exception to grow his hair out, yet King denied his request. King said, “Had I approved Jim’s request, the school would be in chaos. i would be more than willing to help with a fundraiser and donate money to the organization.”
Stack said, “I hope the board understands my request, donating my hair to Locks of Love is a very special project to me.” Stack late said, “I was disappointed when Mrs. King turned my request down.”
Many people like Holly Stack [Stack’s Mother], Bill Valdez [School Board President], and Gisel Rico [President of Locks of Love] were impressed by Stack’s passion to donate his hair. Holly had said, “I am proud of Jim, he is a very giving young man.” Valdez said, “I can’t comment on this issue right now, but we will discuss it at the board meeting next week. I will also say that he has some good points.”
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